Hey TomTellini Thanks so much for all your passion - you are so passionate and not afraid to express. Loved how your voice broke higher on RUNNING AWAY - you will have some fun characters in you for sure. For this script however I feel you were FORCING your choices on us. I know that wasn't your intention - you were meaning to be pleading with them. I get it. But it felt really pushed and over the top. you really take it down in the last half, which really had some stellar moments but it kept going and going (until that beautiful sigh) and even when you did take your time for a second, it doesn't feel like you are reacting to anyone or anything but rather speaking without any responses. Try and incorporate them reacting to you. They could be saying words, they could be showing you body language etc. Just something to break up the RHYTHM. you have a rhthym and while it's filled with emotion - it starts at GO and it ends when you change the emotion - the the rhythm starts again, but in the new emotion. So we'll help you break that - nice to hear where I can take you