Hey Terriblecreator? (I really don't want to remember you this way LOL) I like where you are in your characters emotion to start. You have the right idea, but it sounds more like you are reading this out in the first half, vs feeling it but when you say Don't go, then you kick in with some really great acting - you are reacting. You added a breath, etc - nice work there. MUCH better on the second half than the first. MUCH. You have a beautiful voice with great tone - great industry for you and once you know what to do with it all, you will find a great home in the VO World I'm sure. We'll work on this throughout our 12 weeks together.