Hey Whitelife - thank you for connecting to the copy and recognizing it's depth. This is a monologue that we'd typically see in film classes really, but we see things like this in our VO world as well. I think you PUSHED too hard in this. Even your levels are all BIG in the beginning. I think you're making GREAT choices, but you are over proving them to me. You don't need to push them, instead just naturally feel them and trust that I will hear that. I can tell you're passionate and you care - which is great...Okay now when you took a momment to take a breath and you came back in so nice and intimate - that was so much more powerful. THERE YOU ARE - that's the guy I want to hear. There is a way to get mad and frustrated with them in the beginning without needing to PLEAD/BEG them to listen so trust that feeling it is enough because i can tell you did, but you don't have to OVER show it.....otherwise you would have ROCKED this job