Hey Khalmir - thank you so much for submitting. We have to work a bit more on bringing words to life with more emotions and journey - right now you come across as you are reading, more than in the story telling us about it, so once we learn more about how to put yourself in a real scene with emotions and believability, you will be fantastic, in fact I think you'll grow into a great narrator for corporates and audiobooks - which is perfect for you. This is a great program for you as I'll be able to help you to start playing with different storylines and emotions with the script and they'll come to life for you even more. I can hear some journey and choices in there and I know you're working hard to feel it, but over time you will just feel it and it won't feel like you will have to work at it. Can't wait to work with you more. Looking forward to seeing your growth

Thank you so much for the clear feedback. See you in class!