I LOVE the emotion and the performance. Your emphasis and changing tone was good and helped REALLY sell this story! It sounded like you were a narrator who personally experienced what they are talking about. Solid job. Make sure that this epic performance doesn't take away from your articulation though; certain words felt like they lacked a bit of understanding and clarity in enunciation. Keep working hard, because you're definitely making a ton of great things! Togue twister are a great exercise for stuff like that try a couple before your next read. Add some projection as well and your good to go! Don't feel bad about anything you're constantly improving and that's all that matters. Well done 🙂