Thanks Zxera Sc1: nice positive energy, but it makes you go a bit fast for clarity and for our benefit as the listener trying to follow. Let it breathe, imagine it's happening IRL and it takes the time it takes to occur, not just to say it quick. Sc2: Great anger, but it feels like it stays one-note the whole time. Try and let that be the start if you're keen to show it but then focus on the 5w's you imagine and of course how it's going for the listener you imagine saying this too. Will break it out of repeating the same flavor as you will be adapting and reacting instead of trying to hold onto what you've already shown.