Good read! I feel like it had consistent energy throughout. I might not have the ear for it, but the breaths didn’t bother me that much. Still felt pretty natural overall. A small thing to improve would be watch you audio levels and try to keep it from spiking on certain words. I know that stuff can be fixed in post, but still good to be aware of. I also feel like the rhythm might have been a little predictable, but not sure if that’s necessarily bad for a commercial like this. Interested to see what Deb has to say about that. Nice job though Jared! See you tomorrow!

Great notes - thanks so much for the critique. It's so important for me to know what you hear in your voices so I can help you either create new habits or maintain old ones. I love your brightness. Such a BRIGHT voice you have that is powerful and cuts through - that's great. You did a decent job on the pace but my notes for you would be more about speed - even though I can tell you are working on it, you have an overall FAST delivery and that would be why pronunciations would get in your way. Teaching you more dynamics (slower, faster, louder, softer etc) with genuine emotions will help you so much. And that's what this course is all about - so you hear tons of growth in your delivery as we give you more permissions of what you can do etc. Love your youthful energy and spirit - fantastic base to play with. Just watch that you're not TOO over the top in your energy - that it comes across as disingenuine. Everything needs to be organic - even in a big energy. You'll know what I mean there as we grow together. Lets work on dynamics going forward and we'll have a winning recipe.