Voice of the Universe
adrien for Lilly
- Age: 24
- Lilly is a grad student who hates not being able to solve a problem. She is currently at the top of her class, and her dream is to solve the secrets of dark matter. She is expressive, confident, and works extremely hard, most of the time to the point of exhaustion.
Grad school sucks right now. I need to figure out what went wrong. Maybe the battery wasn’t producing enough current. I’ll re-test everything tomorrow.
*(Note: Scene direction. Not a line) Lilly is looking up at the stars, and she's drifting off.*
The universe is beauty. I wonder…
The math, the rails, and the current were right, but…
Why *Sigh*…The railgun should’ve worked. It’s so frustrating.
Hello Adrien, Firstly, your voice is lovely. You had great control when speaking frustrated in the first and third lines. It was believable. The spacing between the sentences in the first section was a little too spaced out. That might have been an editing choice. Adding a few filler words or shortening the space between lines would help with connecting each sentence, making the delivery more fluid. The energy change in the second line was good. The change was subtle, but it created the sense of her drifting off. Thank you for auditioning. Hopefully, you'll audition for future projects.
Thank you very much for the feedback!!