Alright great writing! But, just some constructive critisism, there is no end to your writing, making it a run on sentence, making everything pushed together. Everything seems to be happening to quicky, just one sequence after another. Not to be rude, but kind of a basic story. Person wakes up, does usual schedule, goes to work, has to work overtime, goes home and sleeps. This doesn't make your'e writing all bad but I think it could use some work!! Still great though and would love to work with you!