Hi, I wanted to take another crack at it. Seeing that you had put a little note there about making the Introduction more flirtatious. I added a few more lines, I hope you don't mine. flirtatious introduction: " Why hello there, gorgeous. ~ I'm Devin...and you?" " Oh! You didn't tell me our fellow traveler would be... so stunning. Hello there, I'm Devin... and you? Flirting/ Teasing: " I love it when I catch you looking at me." " Falling for me is inevitable, so why fight it? " Sarcasm: " Woah, Woah For your information, I've been very dedicated to not dying, my whole life." " There's no need to repeat yourself. I ignored you just fine the first time." " Woah! That scared the heck out of me.. I almost gave a crap." Loving: " Hey, if we live through this. I'll follow you anywhere. " Angry/Sarcasm: " Screw the capital! Nothing but liars and thieves under protection of their status. I wouldn't give it such high appraises if I were you, kid." " You have no idea what I'm capable of, try me!" " All the king's horses and all the king's men, couldn't put the world back together again. What makes you think you can, kid?" " Peace? Why don't you tell that to the other side? We were just fine, until your kind came along." " 'Heck yeah! Woo! We're going on an adventure!' Is what'd I'd say if we weren't in the middle of a war."

I /really/ like it. I loved your lines, there were some in there that Devin wouldnt say such as " Peace? Why don't you tell that to the other side? We were just fine, until your kind came along." Since he's fighting along side the Eleferos, but really good though! P.S, I really love the line: " All the king's horses and all the king's men, couldn't put the world back together again. What makes you think you can, kid?"