First, i need your discord (if you have one) Second, i feel like you should try to have more Character to your voice so for line 1 "Oh, you're just flustered. you've got me alone...." you should try sounding flirtier and for line 2 "I should RIP YOU IN HALF" You sound Angry and full of rage. But Other than that i'd say that is a pretty solid audition, good job.
Thank you! I love criticism my discord is nebula1116 if you want me to redo it’s completely fine no worries!