First off, I think you got that radio broadcast style down very well! It did feel like you went a little fast, particularly in the beginning section, which I'll touch back on in a second, but the speed did seem very appropriate for the style you were going for and sounded nice and clear. You're right, your breaths were somewhat prominent, particularly near the end of the recording, but I think that was mostly due to your beginning, going back to the speed you went through there. It wasn't much, but I couldn't really hear much of a pause from you there, which not only made you a little difficult to keep up with in the beginning, but I think that's also what hindered your breath management later. As strange as it sounds, it's a good thing to keep your breaths in a recording unless specifically asked not to, as it lets the listener keep up with what you're saying. Also I've found it sounds super weird if there are no breaths/pauses when a person is talking, it's almost robotic. (Which, thinking about it might be something to keep in mind if you ever run across a robot character.) Another thing I noticed was at the 10 second mark when you said 'learn about scholarships', there was a movement sound, either like you had quickly rubbed your hand against something or had one of those ironed on stickers on your shirt or something and it moved against itself. Not quite sure what that was, but something to keep an ear out for when you go to audition for something. All-in-all I think you did what you set out to do really really well! Nice job man!

Hey my friend Thank you for all the time you put in to helping each talent. I thought you had some decent points but be careful here, you're not a teacher yet and some of the things you are telling them, we may or may not agree with so I would just caution you not to get TOO specific - only because I don't want them steered in a direction away from where I might want to guide them. I can tell however that you are going to be a fantastic future director/teacher. I can tell you are a very literal thinker so you'll be the kind of talent that I will encourage to take risks with because you will try and color inside the lines always - but that can produce rigid stiff reads. I thought your comments were good here. The first thing I hear that you didn't pick up on - is your speed. You are borderline a bit too fast. Yes, you do sound like you're reading a commercial and you are correct that we are trying to fight against that. For an old school commercial read this would be fine, but for a higher budget more modern read, they would want you to be a bit more conversational. Don't worry this will all get taught to you. Patience grasshopper LOL. I would like you to NOT worry about timing yet. There are no times on these spots for a reason. You are going after the technical aspects and while these are important, they are not something I concerned with for everyone at this level. That worry will come so you are not Incorrect here, but right now I'd like you to focus on connection to the story and emoting the scene. Think about how you want people to feel when you say Get connected. Then how do you want them to feel about where it's at and what it involves etc. There is emotion in everything so we will work together to show you how it can belong even in the most unsuspecting places. I love your work ethic.....