Hey Neko thank you so much for your submission. There was some good stuff in here. I can tell you like to play with emotions - that's awesome. I think you did a decent job trying to take us on a journey. Loved when you kind of whispered "Why, cause you are scared" and then again further on. Love this - keep up the change ups - loud for one part, quieter for another. Scripts need emotional journey's and I think you have a decent handle on that. I would just want to direct a few spots but I think you made some awesome choices and love your intimate side. We'll have some fun.

The first 25 seconds, for me, didn't quite hit home... but then magic happened! I really like everything after that. I got a lot more feeling. It did kinda stay the same energy there in the middle but it was good, believable. Nice job!