Some fantastic notes in here - thank you for sharing. Love your slate - good work. Loved your opening in anger and how physical you made the scene - awesome. There was discovery and change ups - and moments of real - good work. I would have went even more flat at the end about the shell of a man - but that's just a directors choice. OMG LOVE THE LAUGH in fear. - so clever. Allow that wonky laugh to come out while he's talking too - not just before - but loved that choice. this worked. LOVE disgust - that's the right idea here - you're not over adlibbing too much - it's tastefully done. You honored the copy and just embellished. Loved some of the choices you made they were unique and organic and brought the scenes to life - good work.