Hey Mugcake thank you so much for this. I love that you are clear and passionate....but right now it's coming across that you are reading this more than experiencing it. I love the emotions your bringing - you've totally got the right idea, but you're missing fluidity. There are some nice moments of fluidity though - NO WAIT...don't go...but then it goes back to a bit ready - you won't likely hear what that is yet - and that is okay - but as we grow together this is going to grow immensly. Basically what is happening is you are trying too hard so the dialogue is coming across purposeful and almost too slow or broken up - so we just have to keep working towards acting skills etc. That's what this course is designed to do so I can't wait to watch your growth. You've got a great natural vocal, so once you learn what to do with it, you're going to soar.

I loved the very end and I really liked the forcefullness you had at the beginning. My biggest critique would be pacing. It just felt like it was on a metronome? Very deliberate if that makes sense? Shake it out a little and get loose! Have some fun!