Such a nice strong opening - I was glad you didn't stay there. Good work. Many times we suggest if you give them ALL YOU GOT right off the top you have no where to go for climax but because you took it down it worked well with the scene. I felt you had a decent connection to the copy and there was discovery. Didn't sound like you knew everything you were about to say.....and I'm glad you got into a bit of laughing hysterics (even though is was slight) towards the end. I felt this characters pain with this situation. Good work

Listened 3 times just to find the most nitpicky flaw I could... all I've got is I personally didn't love the "you can pretend all you want" line. Fantastic job my friend!