Great to know more about your process and insights into how you saw these. Thanks for the sharing! OTTER: love that we are getting some mouth/life sounds off the top. Try and include a sense of how it makes you feel to have these special goods. Who are you telling the cake info to? Anyone there? Is there a separation from that to talking to HARRY? Energy stays low and similar between both until "may not be able to handle" where we get more intrigue and wonder why this could be so dangerous. Where is Harry, how do you know them, what are the stakes? ZAZA: What is making you laugh? What's the moment before etc. I love the aggression and cavalier attitude. Want the laugh to be based on something, so invent a 5W that makes "you" laugh otherwise it feels like "laugh practice".