Hey Caro - thank you so much for this and the breakdown. Thank you so much for doing the two takes. I love that you were playing and as much as I love it - it's a bit too UNPROFESSIONAL for narration - you've got the right idea by being more conversational, but you are now over doing your choices - so it's not going to be absorbed as well as you think - easier for me to voice this to you than to write it out, but a happy medium between your first and second read would likely be a perfect mix. Adlibs are good but we don't use them AS MUCH in narration. But loved that you genuinely were in a scene - thank you