Very nice slate - simple yet personable and approachable. Thank you so much for doing the work. You've done a good job here. It's very interesting because you totally have the right idea and you do have some nice conversational tone to you but yet there is a lot of READING here as well - it's a bit of both - which normally I want - professional with a bit of conversational. so you are so close - but i feel like it needs more fluidity - it feels slightly stiff - but man it's so close. I would need to voice this to you for you to understand the difference. But super close - good work and you did pull off your storyline