Not bad I definitely enjoyed the approach I think decision you made here were pretty well rounded. If your read is suppose to have someone who has felt the pain of loss than think about how you can play that up use your breathing to your advantage. I personally think if there was a small pause somewhere in there where It felt like they were remembering something I think you would have a more dramatic read altogether. For example the line "threw adversity we find breakthrough" a small sniffle right after that would make it super dramatic and as listener it tells me that they connect with that statement. All in all very well crafted very proud of what you have done. Small little note think about adding a small de-noise there some white noise going on in your submission. It's nothing to crazy so a small de-noise at like 15% should take care of that. If you ever have any questions feel free to ask 😁

Great pace and engaging read. Really feels important to you and that gives some great IRL moments of talking TO us. Really nice work. Some great warmth and intimacy in here.