That's great, it'll keep getting stronger with the work you're doing. Nice power and pace. Sure a little slow for the spot's 30s needs but a great energy up and out to the listener. Some great moments of spontaneity and what sounds like genuine interest to share with us. A great showing of your personality. It's VERY OK to breathe off the words and lines, knowing that they can be cleanly edited out later and not watch the clock too! Good work.