Important things first, I really like your performance! I don't really have anything to say about the voice acting itself. There are a few other things I want to point out though. First of all, while I personally can't help but smile at that little personal touch of saying a few words at the beginning (middle and end), I do feel like it's a little too long making it seem somewhat 'unprofessional'. Obviously this is not a super serious payed project, just thought I mention it anyways. It seems like you recorded that whole thing in one go. While it's great that you can do a pretty good performance in one go, for an actual audition it's totally fine to re record lines a few times or just cut out pauses/noise in between. Again that's nothing big - just mentioning it^^. Last but not least, there seems to be quiet a bit of background noise going on. Not static from the microphone but either you moving around and touching something that's connected to the mic, or people walking around in the house. If it's you, well all I can say is try to avoid that :D. If the noise is due to other people, it would probably be good to point that out. Basically communicating that if necessary, you can record it without. It has nothing to do with your performance, so I don't think it matters for an audition in itself, but if I were to choose someone for a role and it would seem like there were that much background noise going on, that might be a turnoff. Unless they point out that for the final product they could record it without of course.