Jojo's Bizarre Adventures: Parts 1-8 Manga Dub
drow3n for Yukako Yamagishi
Obsessed with Koichi!
Koichi, some things might happen that might make you momentarily hate me, but when comes the time for you to leave this place, and you see how much you've changed...You will thank me. You will think of how much you need me in your life, you'll understand that you can't live without me.I'm not going to let you leave this house until you fall in love with me. I'll definitely make you love me, or else... I might have to kill you.
Koichi, you have something shining within! I know because I've always been watching... And I... I like everything about you, Koichi
I think you can be a bit more blushy and cutesy with your speech to Koichi, and a bit more angry for her "I won't let you leave the house", but for her other lines you did awesome! Especially "You have something shining within!"
Thank you for the feedback! I can re-do it if you'd like? :]
If you'd like, yes! If not totally ok as well! I'm just giving feedback here so people can give their very best, and hopefully if they take the advice I can cast them!