Quest Friends: Loell's Memory
TheMightyNoah for Commander TJ (he/him) [Age: 20s-40s]
The leader of the Angulan Knights who is a mix between a frat boy and a drill sergeant. He’s either yelling at you or laughing at mean-spirited “jokes,” likely both. (70 lines)
You see that Marv? You’ve gotta put your biceps into a proper door knock. But I suppose you need ‘em first, am I right?
What the hell kind of legendary knight is named “Loell?” (Scoffs) LO-ELL. You might as well stick with lamb-chop in that case; it won’t make history, but it’ll make a good snack! But we aren’t snacks, are we, knights!?
You did well on the mission today but you gotta learn your place in the pecking order, chickadee. We can only help the weak if there’s respect and discipline and fraternity within our organization, you got that? Don’t mess with me.
The way TJ emphasizes "biceps" is so fun. The big thing for TJ is that he (in most interpretations) exudes an overwhelming forcefulness, which I didn't fully get in this audition. It's tough for me to provide any specific changes that could help with that, as I know it's something I couldn't do myself.
Got it, thank you for the feedback!