You sounded a bit like Cthulhu in the first two lines haha, so I'll comment on the third one. Well, I think it didn't quite match the character in that condition, but I guess it's because you don't know his background story.
haha oh well maybe a Cthulhu would be quite nice :'D I could make it a bit more serious without those cthulu whsipers. and a lil deeper with the voice. x3