Your enunciation and mic quality are spot on. The main thing I have for feedback is the phrasing. Right now it sounds like you're reading a narrative out loud (which techincally, you are). These lines are a conversation, and they should flow like one. Try to imagine your saying this TO somebody. Also, I envision Kanbaru to be a pretty roundabout sort of character. The kind that just lets water run off the duck's back. I'd love to hear another take of these. If you're interested, email me some retakes at [email protected] and I'll keep on giving you feedback.