Future Diary of a Wimpy Kid (Future Diary Abridged)
Antedrigus for Yukiteru Amano
The protagonist of this abridged episode. Yuki is a coward who is just trying to get through his day while avoiding the advances of your normal, everyday stalker. He is thrown into a death game unknowingly where he uses his phone to predict the future to get an advantage over his opponents. The problem is, every participant has a power like that!
We are looking for a cowardly/socially-awkward type of tone for him.
P.S. It's cause-ality, guys.
(Realizing, then stupidly happy) Wait a second I have the powers of causality at my whim… What should I do with it? CHEAT AT MATH!! YAY!!!!
(Running away, terrified) A hot girl is chasing me! I can’t believe that 4chan chain post was right! The hottest girl in school is trying to kill me with calculus!
So your first line was really solid. I think your second line however didnt give any urgency to the predicament that he finds himself in. He didnt seem like he was running from someone trying to kill him.
no problem, thank you for the feedback i can retake the second line a few times if you'd like :)