While I like the voice, it does seem more like reading the line a little (especially with the first line). And that's totally fine with the accent. I ask for Australian but if you sound better with just your normal accent, that's okay (and I do like your accent as is right now haha) I think perhaps if you just said the lines a bit quicker and energy, it might sound better. If I had to use a scale, you're emotion is like a 4 when I need perhaps something around 6. With the first line specifically, Leon is talking about the city he cares for. The people he cares for. Although not sad, but speaking with some empathy. The last line was great, although slightly dry in delivery. Anyway, hope that makes sense and hope that you make another audition. I liked what you have so far.