If Leeches Ate Peaches - one-shot radio drama/podcast
miickeydeez for Veronica
Veronica is another patient in the hospital; a girl in her late teens who befriends Annabelle shortly upon arrival. She is soon to be undergoing ECT for reasons she doesn't understand. She's understandably terrified, and scared of losing parts of herself or her memory she won't even remember she lost. A lot of her is filled with rage, and she finds it difficult to express it healthily sometimes. As such, she has moments where she really explodes without quite knowing why.
Voice notes:
Pitch - medium , perhaps a little raspy
Accent - any
(stuttering, awkward, words tumbling out) You’re Annabelle Lee! I know your music - from before! Hard to forget, really. I'm - I'm Veronica...by the way...
(upset, angry, like word vomit) I don’t want to forget. Doctor keeps sayin' they’re gonna take me to electro— electro— To ECT… I’m really, really scared. Because nothing happened to put me here. I just… got sad. And I used to be really happy. All it took was for him to say I was broken and I was. Pretty Victorian, eh? But I want you to write everything. I want you to write everything that happens and make it a song and make me remember if I can’t, ‘cause everyone knows— EVERYONE KNOWS— that you can’t erase crayon.
(humming something, sounding a little distant and dreamlike)
You've got some really great intensity, it's lovely to see, and you've got some awesome moments with the voice cracks in line 2 - you just might wanna watch your input volume a bit, as your mic seems to clip a bit right when you're really getting into it. Big fan of the rush you have in line 1 too, so would love to see you try something a lil different! For line 1, could I see a bit more awkwardness/breathlessness - a bit like you can't breathe, and you're sorta whispering in excitement/nervousness. And for line 2, would looove to see a bit more of a build to that explosion you've got going on - you've almost nailed it with that third take, but if you could up the pace a tiny bit and sound a little more like the anger hasn't quuuuite burst out of you, that'd be amazing! Sorry for the absolute PARAGRAPH lol - great great work though, thanks so much for your time so far :)
Thank you so much for the feedback!