I'm no pro, Bro... but it seems like you're clipping and popping. I do like how you sound. I could actually envision you trying to talk on the radio :-)
Thanks man! I don’t have any professional equipment on hand which is probably why. I’ll try to get to some and resubmit if you think it would make a difference in getting selected.
So I was able to get the clip edited a bit to improve the sound quality. Let me know if you’d like to hear the updated version