Sorry I'm late, here's my updated feedback: This works a lot better than the previous take. The darker more mysterious tone gives a more sinister sound to the voice and that shines well here. One thing I might say is there are parts that sound a bit TOO exaggerated...it's like a word here or there but overall well done.
Ok, I am glad you liked this one better over the other one. I was worried I toned it down too much. But thank you for your critiques. I will keep those in mind if I get the role. Thank you again.