if anyone Has any advice or critiques, i would really appreciate it. I see so many people being so kind on this platform, but I feel like I have much more I can learn or improve on. So please notes are helpful. Thank You.
Your combat cries are Ace, man! You are good. My main critique is that: 1) The accent you're affecting here is not committed to as much as it should be. I'm picking up a bit of Italian, Scandanavian and even British at some parts. Real nitpick incoming: When you said "I'll bathe in your blood!", you said it like "bluud" the way the Brits do. I think a belligerent Nord would say it more like "blahd". 2) I feel like you linger a bit too much on the Fargoth lines, as though you're sending the player on a dangerous mission collecting from a Wood Elf. Now, if you were sending the player to collect from Dagoth Ur, that's where you should linger for drama. You feel me? But like I said, overall you've got it down.
Hey wood elves are dangerous man! They eat people. But yea I can understand what you say. Just tried the variation in words like blood you mentioned and it makes sense. I am trying to think through the 1st dialogue like you mentioned. I feel like where I “over seasoned” was with the ending of it. “And I’d like you to find fargoth’s hiding place.” Thinking it through yes I could have pick up a pace and changed some inflection because it does sound like I was sending the player on a dangerous quest. Thank you for the feedback! I really appreciate it.
