The Fire Master: Dr. Flame [R-Rated Superhero Audio-Play Series]
huckleberryfinn for Tony Esmeralda Rico
[Excited]:
I can't believe it... The USA, the land of opportunity and freedom and an overwhelming love for Avocados for some reason. The work that I do here will finally make a difference. It'll be hard at first... but I know that with enough hard work and determination I'll be a great hero! I believe it! There he is... Dr. Flame saving me from a villain! I can't wait to finally prove myself as a good side kick for-
[Hears Dr. Flame scold him and Tony is deflated]:
Aaaaand dreams crushed.[Scared to somewhat doubtful of himself]:
Uhh...Guys?! Do you think we're under-prepared for this?! I-I-I Have hopes, dreams, a future wife in mind....other failures.[Bashfulness]
I'm dancing with my dream-girl Angelina. Everything coming up for "Tony Esmer--
[Clears throat to avoid his middle name]
Rico"!
Your voice is on point but I think the delivery and energy aren't quite hitting the mark. Try doing the second half of the first line sooner after the first. When you do the second line, bring in more energy to the line, like you're about to lose your mind. For the third line, you want to sound a little more dreamy and starting to build your confidence. Please also do 3 takes of each line. I usually find that it helps when you're doing lines.
Thank you so much for the feedback, I will not be able to record the lines this weekend due to family events but I will get them done by Monday, if thats okay:)