Awesome work here LaTasha, you had a controlled pace through the read that is very good to see. Being controlled and measured in your delivery is a super important skill and allows for greater mastery of the script itself. You don't stumble over as much, you can read ahead and plan the delivery, you can choose where to put in breath breaks. Going slow and taking your time also keeps the nerves down and usually makes it easier to recover from mistakes.

Speaking of you only had a few spots in the read where you did stumble. In the center paragraph on "no interest till september. But, limited time only though" The hesitation and tripping up on these two sentences would warrant backing up and hitting them both again. Whenever you do hit a snag in a read that should be your recovery process. Stop reading, back up to a natural break point in the script, and take the line again. A natural break point are things like the beginnings of sentences, commas, or other locations in a script where you naturally pause the read momentarily. The reason we go back and take that whole line again is because just fixing the word we messed up on usually doesn't align with the rest of the audio we already have recorded. It's clear to tell when a sentence is stitched together like that and so it doesn't actually fix the mistake.

In projection terms you were at a comfortable talking volume at like 3/10 but we wanted to hear you projecting out to a full gym of people! More like a 6/10 or 7/10! Fill up those lungs in big deep breaths and support the read with big columns of air all the way through! We want to hear that your able to get up that loud and properly support the script. Dynamics is in my opinion one of the major ways we as voice actors can convey emotions and nuance in our acting, and dynamic volume does so much to add to the believability and tone of a read. So let's try and expand that volume range and get loud!

Great Work here LaTasha, here's to more great work moving forward!