I was having a call with my friends while recording this, I was thinking about when sometimes voice actors needs to record in a studio with other people

I was really hard for me, I think I sounded a little stiffer than usual

Good start to identifying the scene and the context for the script. 

For actual auditions and gigs, you should remove the excess breath and mouse clicks at the beginning and any other places you hear a mouse click.

Really nicely done! I could feel the emotion you put into it and enjoyed the change-ups in volume, pacing, inflection and the added humanisms - the breaths/sighs. The moments the character took to convey the message. 

Well done! Keep up the great work!